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I'm not expecting a fairytale
Freedom of oppression
Or any such thing
Just to find the little place
A garden full of green

To find the sin in roses--
It's a green one
Do you see?

Or does it exist?
Contemplate
that little flowery green

It's thorns are just as sharp
And sinful as the rest
Do you see it?
There--
on that empty plot
Dried and caked
Flatten and Dried

That little flower green

A rose can't exist in envy, so you say
So can sin not exist?
Can a flower love the sun so much
That it puts it silent to rest

Tell me if you can say so much
About sin
And green flowers--that shouldn't be
Reds, pinks, yellows
Is what it should.

But then what would that be?
An imperfect fairytale--
You know the one's I mean

With apples
And evil stepmothers
Or those who died in birth

That make the princess
Turn down that path--
Aren't they it, then?
Do you see?

They're little.
They're alone
For that short period of time

That little--
oh so little
Garden of green.

Not narrow, nor wide
But small, compact, resolute
Against the much loved sun

Does it exist?
I think so
Because it is--

It is the flowers sin

to not be pink, red--jonquil
to be different from the rest
But all the same--
All the same

A rose
Like the rest
©2009-2010 ~FaroresTune
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Author's Comments

wow, the title actually makes sense with the work -blinks- interesting...

Written as a practice for the found poem due in English class on Friday (3/6/09). Will have to change it around some (use actual words in the book) but...it's good enough for now.

Quote: "But you could not have a green rose. but perhaps somewhere in the world you could"(pg 5, A Portrait of a Young Man as an Artist )

Preview Art from Google (typed in 'green rose' )

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:iconalierturk:
I can just say cool to read...

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:iconfarorestune:
-smiles- I'm very glad you think so~

(and thanks SO much for the watch and fav! :hug: I really, really appreciate it!)

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:iconlexiell:
Ohh... I really love how it ends... :)
I think, that overall.. it flows quite nicely.. XP Sorry I don't have a better, longer comment.. but I did quite like the poem ^^
:iconfarorestune:
ahah thank you~

it's surprising that I came up with it just by...half typing it in an email (that was supposed to be a reminder for something else entirely) that's fine. Poems sometimes are supposed to be, well, you like them but you can't explain why. -has had that happen before-

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:iconreveredmage:
You know, you have this way or writing that everything just seems to flow~~

You 'ought to write more poems~ I like your style

But then what would that be?
An imperfect fairytale--
You know the one's I mean

With apples
And evil stepmothers
Or those who died in birth

That make the princess
Turn down that path--
Aren't they it, then?
Do you see?


I like that part. It's pretty cool, y'know?~


...How's that for a comment? XD

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:iconfarorestune:
and on my comments thing it said you replied to a question mark XD

But I'm very glad you liked it~ Not sure what inspired me (I seriously tried to write down this poem during choir...but couldn't, then during 8th period it just BAM came to me when I was sending myself a reminder email...so I just...went from there?) -hopes the teacher likes it enough to say it's okay to submit for her assignment-

uwah, and again those are some of my favorite lines XD (I hope when people see 'birth' they think 'childbirth' y'know since...it wouldn't make sense otherwise XD)

XD YES IT IS~ It's wonderfully stupendous that I don't know what to say~ Kudo's to you and your epic happyism-ness~ -runs off because it's after 8PM here-

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